[Dream Zero]

BANNER ANTHEM NINE

Thus so it was dark, and now it shines
Electrified, all these lines of mine
Rhyming on time, with digital crime
I do this for free, not for the dimes

Check it out, super moderator
Sitting in gators, peeping haters
Save print send, skating posts on paper
Control alt delete, see you later

Stories that wow, in the here and now
Punchlines that stick, rip, spit and they pow
On top of my soapbox, this I vow
I will never die, you'll wonder how

Threads are being built, like a station
Five pages long, such a sensation
Deep deep thoughts, marianna's basin
Flirting like mad, still women chasin

High School Gigolo, damn that's witty
Magical land, Collision City
Writing stories so dark gritty
Pissing people off, no more pity

You see it's me, chatterbox DZ
I'm online making this look EZ
Really, can you still even see me
Feel me, I know you wanna be me

Come on and give this man a mirror
I think the picture's getting clearer
It's a man, with a plan, club of fans
All this man, tall he stands, ain't it grand

My words, they mesmerize and inspire
Veterans in awe, noobies admire
Silent times, I'm the voice of desire
Eight years strong and damn I'm still on fire

All Hail: Banner Anthem Nine

There's no one like me yo
I'm just what you need though
Your personal hero
I am the dream zero

[SilverStone]

I've been thinking of what to say to this. I dislike reading poetry unless it is easier to understand and doesn't have too much subtext, like some Transcendentalists'. Yet, your works are understandable and are easy to relate to without necessitating an explanation, thereby detracting from the poetry.

Banner Anthem Nine sounds a lot like contemporary early 21st century rap, which I dislike, however the way you carried your words by dosing it with your "awesomeness" (coughegocough) created a similar but more unique effect. I felt as if you combined what inspires rock and alternative/other kinds of rock with the rap style. Almost like those scary fusion food recipes, but you created something "tasty" from a combination of things that usually wouldn't mix (I am referring to Jay Z and Linkin Park).

In short, I really enjoyed the poem. I could tell you were talking about forums, or something electronically related, since "post" seems to have the connotation of posting on a forum or sending an e-mail. There are also many elements pertaining to JanimeS in particularly. One instance is when you referred to yourself and Collision City.

The structure and organization of Banner Anthem Nine is like a story, complete with an exposition to climax to resolution and conclusion, in line with Freytag's pyramid. (And if I were to do a complete analysis, the "plot" itself was about you in the context of JanimeS, but correct me if I am wrong. I therefore must add that if I were to participate in the voting event for 2010, I'm definitely going to vote you as most egotistical member. It's part of your charm. ^^)

Keep up the good work writing, verse or prose!

[Dream Zero]

Such a marvelous analyzation. you actually covered a lot of good points and symbology.
Now aside from the blatant banner waving of self promotion, can you figure out why it's called banner anthem nine?

[SilverStone]

Nope. I've been thinking for a long time. And still haven't figured it out. Does it have reference to revolutionary rhetoric? I'm thinking American Revolutionary War, French Revolution (all three stages), the failed Germanic revolutions, the Bolshevik revolution, etc. Care to tell?

[Dream Zero]

That's an interesting concept. I suppose it could very well represent modern approach to the revolutionaries of a digital urban area, but this particular answer is just a tad simpler:

Every main verse has a nine syllable count. Hence, Banner Anthem Nine.
(even the title was nine syllables but I dropped "the" because it sounded stupid.)

Go ahead and count, you know you want to. XD

[SilverStone]

(Yes, I did count.)

Ah! So that is why it sounded a lot like iambic pentameter! I thought I was just going crazy from reading too much analyses of Shakespeare and watching all of his movies.

I was more curious about why you chose Banner Anthem, unless because this was your banner/anthem, you chose those words?

Edit: As I was thinking, I realized that the number nine in Chinese sounds like the word for long. And this was a "self-promotion," then the nine is fitting because it immortalized you. So that is my extra two cents of meta-thinking.

[Dream Zero]

Immortality is on my short list of things to achieve. Good to know I'm on the right path!

[linnyu]

You've really thought this out haven't you?

But it's a good poem DZ. Although I'm not sure about the immortalized part, I think most rappers are going for notoriety. Unless you're going for beat poetry.


@Silver Stone: "nine" in canto right? (is it the same as in mandarin?) In mandarin it could be interpreted as "long", but with a different connotation than the "long" in a phrase like, "have a long, long life Chairman Mao." It would be more of a, "I waited so long for you." It's sort of whinier, if that makes any sense. It's not the sort of long you eat noodles to.

But still, yeah. It could work.

[SilverStone]

Well, I'm thinking of Jiu3(nine, and I think the tone is 3, but may be 2) and Jiu3 (long time). Perhaps you are thinking of Chang3 in Mandarin?

[Dream Zero]

linnyu, on 29 December 2009 - 02:03 AM, said:

But it's a good poem DZ. Although I'm not sure about the immortalized part, I think most rappers are going for notoriety. Unless you're going for beat poetry.

DZ has no interest in notoriety. Only immortality. As long as someone, somewhere, is reading/listening/talking/remembering about me or one of my various works, then DZ will never die. Thus immortality.

[SilverStone]

Kleos- glory, often implying fame and immortality (in the memory of others), achieved as a result of one's time (acts of excellence meriting honor).

Achieved? [x]

Yupperz!

[linnyu]

SilverStone, on 29 December 2009 - 02:20 AM, said:

Well, I'm thinking of Jiu3(nine, and I think the tone is 3, but may be 2) and Jiu3 (long time). Perhaps you are thinking of Chang3 in Mandarin?

I'm thinking of Jiu3, except Jiu is a long time, but does not necessarily detonate "long life" which would be Chang.

@DZ: well, you haven't died yet, so that's good and you're pretty immortal on this site.

[Dream Zero]

BANNER ANTHEM SIX
Anthem Six, please all hail
Behind in life, I trail
Straight up nervous, I failed
Coffin; my final nail

There's no need for trying
My soul won't stop crying
I still keep on lying
Cause I'm scared of dying

All my questions are: why?
All my lessons archived.
All my restlessness sighed.
All my best are denied.

No more heroes, they're gone
No more chances, it's on
No more weakness, I'm strong
No more night time, just dawn

I see spirits where from
I hear dangerous drums
Redemption's not for some
Salvation will not come

Sanity's broke, no time
I'm so sad, I'm not fine
Tick tock, rhythmic chime
Last days, losing my mind

Glorious: Death Divine

[Dream Zero]

If you are able to decipher the common core of both Banner Anthems you will discover the intended way to read/enjoy Banner Anthem Six.